The Trouble Is

[kfttjdb]

Here is Chapter 15. If I wait any longer I'll change it... Yeah, no real comments. *bricked*

Chapter 15:
The Right Thing To Do?

Anna felt as if she had been walking backwards when she finally reached Ren’s bedroom door. She hadn’t seen or heard from him since Yoh and Horo carried him to his room the night before and was apprehensive about what she wanted to say to him. As she raised her fist to knock, she hesitated. What if he’s still a wreck? She thought to herself. She knew she wasn’t prepared to deal with another break down. As she analyzed the situation her fist slipped from its static position in the air and hit the door.

“Come in,” she heard him say. Surprisingly, his voice was calm.

Anna walked slowly and cautiously into Ren’s room, quickly focusing her eyes on his expression.

“Close the door behind you,” he said without looking at her.

She obeyed and began looking around the room. Ren’s things were missing. As she examined the empty room further, she finally noticed Ren had three large suitcases and a duffle bag on his bed.

“What are you doing?” she asked suddenly.

He looked at her as if the question was confusing. “I’m packing, Anna. I thought it was obvious.” He replied.

“Yes I see that, but why are you packing?” her pitch became higher.

“We’ve talked about this for a while. I think it’s time now. I’m moving back home.” He continued to stuff one of the suitcases without looking at her.

“You’re moving out? Just like that? When are you planning to do this?” Anna’s voice became threatening.

“Jun is meeting me at the airport in five hours.” He replied softly as if he didn’t want her to hear him.

“You’re moving out TODAY?! And you didn’t feel the need to tell any of us?” Anna was screaming at him.

“I’m telling you now. I’ll tell every one else when it’s time for me to leave for the airport.” He replied.
“So no one will stop you?” Anna replied coldly.

“It doesn’t have to be like this, Anna. Just be happy for me. You’ve wanted me out of the house for a long time anyway. Now you get to finally see me go.” Ren rested his hands on top of the suitcase and looked at her.

“You are such a coward.” Anna spat.

“I am no coward.” Ren groaned.

“So you’re not running away? Ren, this is the dumbest thing I’ve ever seen you do! Don’t try and justify it by saying it’s what I want. This is about Yukihiro. She broke your heart and now you’re running away from the pain. You are unbelievable!” she walked closer to him and punched him in the shoulder.

“This is not about her, Anna. I need to find myself and get the old Ren back. I’m not in pain. I’m perfectly fine. Ren Tao doesn’t run away from anything!” He was yelling back at her.

“Well in that case, I’ll miss you.” She kissed him on the cheek and headed for the door.

“So…you’re not going to try to stop me?” Ren asked, puzzled.

“If you say you’re okay, I have to believe you. I just hope you’re not making a mistake.” With that she left the room.

Ren stared at his door in disbelief. He couldn’t tell if her last statement was sincere.

Anna ran down the stairs and bolted through the front door of the house. “This is out of control,” she said aloud.

---

Horo walked into the kitchen and was delighted to see Tamao cooking. He released a triumphant sigh and stretched out his arms. “Great, I am starving!” he exclaimed.

“It won’t be ready for a while, so don’t get too excited,” Tamao replied dryly.

“Did you see Anna bolt out of the house? I wonder where she went?” Horo said curiously.

“I didn’t know she was gone. I was trying to help Yoh find something. We didn’t find it.” Tamao said.

“What was he looking for?” Horo asked.

“I don’t know. Every time I asked him he acted like I was supposed to know.” She replied.

“Doesn’t matter anyway. Now back to Anna. She seemed upset when she left. I wonder what happened?” Horo said. He sat on the floor by the opening.

“Maybe she forgot something at the market,” Tamao suggested.

“No. I think it was about Ren. She came out of his room.”

“You didn’t say she came out of his room. It makes sense now. Maybe they had a fight.” Tamao said.

“Why would they have a fight? They seem to be getting along much better than they used to. I don’t think that’s it.” Horo scratched his head.

“Well if you’re so concerned about it, Horo, why don’t you go upstairs and ask Ren?” Tamao asked blankly.

Horo paused for a few moments. “No, I’ll wait. He would just bite my head off.” He said after careful deliberation.

“Where’s Anna?” Yoh called as he skipped down the staircase. “I didn’t even know she left.”

Horo and Tamao did not answer him.

---

“I don’t want you to braid my hair,” Hao protested. “Why do you have to touch it at all?”

“I just like to. I’ll take it down as soon as I’m done. Come on, be a good sport. Besides, it will keep me busy,” Yukihiro said cheerily.

Hao growled at her and crossed his arms. “You’re not touching my hair.” He said angrily.

“You mess with my hair all of the time and I don’t complain. You even knot it up so I can’t comb it and I don’t scream at you for it. You have to compromise here.” She dropped her bottom lip as to beg him.

“That’s not going to work. No one braids my hair. Not even you.” He said sharply.

“Liar. I braided your hair last week.” She said with a smile.

He opened his mouth to give Yukihiro a rude reply but was interrupted by the sudden beating from the front door.

“Who is that?” Yukihiro stood and walked toward the front of the house.

“I’ll get it. Just stay back here.” Hao cautioned her.

She stayed in the sitting room where they were and Hao went to the front door. He didn’t look before opening it; he didn’t care to know who was knocking. The important thing was getting rid of the visitor.

“What do you want,” he growled as he swung the door open.

“I want to talk to Yukihiro.” was the reply.

“Anna? It’s been a while. What brings you here?” Hao said, taking some of the edge off of his voice.

“I want to talk to Yukihiro now. Are you going to move out of the way, or do I have to use other methods?” Anna frowned at him and tapped her right foot on a stone.

“I’m growing tired of this,” Hao sighed, “What, are you Ren’s bodyguard now? Go home, Anna.”

“I’m not leaving until I talk to Yukihiro,” Anna said, stepping into his face.

“They’re like clones!” Hao said, mocking her. “Yukihiro, Ren’s bodyguard is here!” he called into the house.

Anna moaned and waited for Yukihiro to emerge from the dark house. Hao did not move at first, but when he locked eyes with Yukihiro he was given the signal to leave.

“Anna, what are you doing here?” Yukihiro asked calmly.

“I’ll make this quick, so just listen to me.” Anna started. Yukihiro looked at her with confusion.

“As we speak, Ren is packing. Yes, he’s packing. Yukihiro, he’s moving back home. If he does this, you’ll never see him again. Don’t say it doesn’t matter because you and I both know it does. I’m telling you as a woman who knows what it’s like to love some one and be too stubborn to admit it. If you let him get on that plane, you’re the biggest fool I know.” Anna watched her expression then continued, “I don’t want you two to loose out on something great because you have too much pride. Yukihiro, be honest with yourself and get over there!”

“Thanks for coming by,” Yukihiro said calmly.

“That’s all you have to say to me?” Anna’s voice was threatening.

“If Ren wants to leave, I have no right to stop him. I hope he has a safe trip and a good life. Go home, Anna.” Yukihiro smiled at her weakly and turned for her door.

“That’s it?” Anna called to her.

“Yes. That’s it.” Yukihiro said without turning around.

[KuroiInu]

Another great one, Renna-chan.

-Poor Ren-sama. He's going to far with moving back to China...
-Yukihiro's messed up. First it's "Oh, let's start over," then it's "Go away!" Then it's "Ren used to drink milk... T-T..." and now it's, "Fine, let him move back, I don't care!" Yeeesh. The girl's even more indecisive than I am...

[Sayoky]

NUUU...that's like so...unfair!! Why are they both acting like that?? I hate people that are being proud when they don't have to......poor Ren sama....*sniff* v_v *takes Yukihiro by her hand and yells* You!!! Go stop Ren you low-life-pride-stupid-idiot-heart-braking-guy-basher girl!!!!!

[kfttjdb]

Aw, thanks guys. You caught the indecisiveness and immaturity. I thought I was laying it on too thick but meh. Um, I don't have Chapter 16 with me...*bricked*

Oh and just because I feel like spoiling, the story has 17 chapters. Ha! *runs*

[Sayoky]

NUU....your story can't be over that fast!!!!!

[kfttjdb]

"That fast"? Girl, this thing was 17 chapters!!! *slaps forehead* I didn't want it to be this long because it's my first fic, but um, I talk too much so I write too much. You get the idea.

16 will be up later on, probably tonight.

Oh, by the way, I now have a fanfiction account so I won't have to further bore the members of the board with my nonsense. (what can I say, I have a "flair for the dramatic")

[Sayoky]

you forgot to mention that all your chapters up till now are more than extraordinay and that they kept me reading!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Geeezzz......9_9 if you finish this story swear that you'll make another one as exciting as this!! Swear!!! *crosses arms and waits for an answer*

[kfttjdb]

Wow, thanks Sayoky. You had better read all the crap I'm gonna load into ff.net then... Ha ha ha!

*cough* Now then, Chapter 16. Sorry it took so long. I was being lazy:

Chapter 16:
Saying Goodbye

“Did I tell you I love you today?” Lyserg asked softly as he followed Pirika into the main hallway.

“I don’t remember hearing that.” Her cheeks began to redden.

He suddenly stopped her stride and wrapped his arm around her waist. Leaning closer to her ear he whispered, “I love you.”

Pirika smiled at the profession. She had only returned the statement once before and since would reply with the same smile of adoration. “I’ll walk you out,” she said innocently. They held hands as they walked to the front door, passing Horo on the stairs along the way.

After a long sigh, Horo greeted them. “Oh hi, Lyserg. I didn’t know you were still here. You should stay. Dinner will be ready soon.” He said as calmly as he could.

“That would be great, Lyserg!” Pirika exclaimed, “Do you have anything to do?”

“It wouldn’t matter anyway. Anything can be put on hold for you,” he responded warmly.

“Great! I’ll tell Tamao you’re staying,” Horo said as he stood quickly. “Let me go vomit. I mean, go tell her.” He said under his breath as he walked into the kitchen.

“Stay here. I’m going to talk to Ren for a few minutes.” Pirika said, giving Lyserg a hug.

“Tell him I said hello.” He replied.

---

“Where have you been?” Yoh asked worriedly, “I didn’t know you were out of the house.”

“I was trying to help Ren, but I think I made things worse.” Anna sighed.

They were in their bedroom again sitting on the floor. Yoh leaned back against one of the walls and Anna rested her head in his lap weakly.

“Ren’s moving out. He didn’t want anyone to know until he was walking out of the door, but you should know.” Anna sighed.

“He’s moving where?” Yoh asked puzzled.

---

“Are you out of your mind?! What is wrong with you?” Pirika screamed.

“Lower your voice.” Ren demanded.

“You can’t just leave! Today? That’s crazy! I can’t believe this!” she said angrily.

“I’ve made up my mind. It’s the right thing to do, Pirika. You’re the one who convinced me to find myself again. That’s exactly what I’m going to do. If we were ever friends, you would be happy for me.” Ren said calmly.

Pirika paced back and forth in front of Ren’s bed. “If we were ever friends, Ren, you wouldn’t be doing this to me.” She sighed, “You can’t do this, Ren. Don’t do this.”

“I have to. If you just took a minute to think about it you would see it’s the best thing for everyone.” Ren tried to hold her hand but she pulled away.

“Don’t leave!” she yelled.

Ren paused for a few moments then frowned. “It’s already decided, Pirika. You’re not going to change my mind. Just be happy for me.” He said sternly.

Pirika frowned and punched him in the shoulder. “I can’t be happy for you if I don’t agree with you. You’re letting her run you off, and I won’t believe anything else!” with that wounding comment, she stormed out of his bedroom and slammed the door.

---

“So he’s leaving?” Horo asked, confused.

“That’s what Anna said,” Tamao answered sadly.

“When is he leaving?” Horo asked reluctantly.

“In about thirty minutes.”

Horo sighed. “I can’t believe he’s just packing up and leaving like this. It makes no sense. It’s one thing to be upset about a girl, but China’s so far away.”

“I know.” Tamao said dryly, “We really don’t have time to say goodbye or anything. Just like that, he’ll be gone.”

They sat silently at the bottom of the stairs waiting for Ren to bring down the rest of his luggage. The mood of the house was solemnly hopeless. When Anna told Yoh about Ren leaving, it traveled through the house like the rippling waves of an ocean and just as devastating. No one knew what to say or do so they waited for Ren to emerge from his bedroom.

“Is he down here yet?” Pirika asked impatiently.

“No, he hasn’t come down yet,” Tamao replied, staring at the floor.

“I can’t believe he’s doing this,” Lyserg said, “It’s just so sudden.”

Horo spun around suddenly at the rumbling sound of the stairs but was disappointed to see Anna descending.

“He’ll be down soon. Yoh is going to drop him off at the airport,” she said gloomily.

No one acknowledged the comment because it meant Ren was really leaving. Anna paced back and forth in front of Tamao and Horo and crossed her arms over her chest.

A few minutes later, Yoh and Ren emerged from the top of the stairs. Everyone in the room except Pirika watched them as they carried Ren’s bags down the stairs and to the front door.

“I’ll be back, Anna.” Yoh said softly. She nodded in response.

“So I guess this is goodbye.” Ren said calmly. He didn’t know what else to say. Everyone in the room stared at him with absolute sadness as if waiting for him to change his mind. Everyone except for Pirika, that is.

“Leave already,” Pirika responded coldly.

Ren smiled at her and responded, “I’ll miss you too.” The reply quickly forced her eyes to fill with tears so she darted into the kitchen to hide her facial expression. Ren looked around the room one last time and then slowly followed Yoh out of the door.

A few minutes later, the group was startled by random knocking on the front door. Anna, who was the closet, opened it to greet the visitor.

“Yukihiro, what are you doing here?” Anna asked, surprised.

Slumped over and out of breath, she replied, “Ren. Where is he?”


Now then, the FINAL chapter will be up very soon. Like real soon. Like probably before Monday because all bets are off when I go back to work. *bricked* So tune in...

[Matamune]

=D LOVE. Seriously, Reeeen ;_;

Dx CLIFFHANGER!

Yes, I've been secretly reading your story XD; I just never commented and since this is the second-to-last chapter, I HAD to comment. D:


Lovely idea and writing Renna <3 I hope to see more from you! =DDDD

D< THAT MEANS WRITE *SHOT*

[kfttjdb]

Thanks, Mata. I appreciate the compliments. And thanks to all of you who have supported my little venture. I think it was too long, considering it's my first, but meh.

I didn't forget about the last chapter, I've just been too "preoccupied" to post it. (I won't elaborate on that here; too depressing and graphic) Anyway, Chapter 17 a.k.a. the final chapter will be posted today or tomorrow. I would like for everyone who has been reading the story to refrain from posting in the thread until then. Here's why:

After the story ends, I would like those who have read the story to review it as a whole. What I mean is, I would like some feedback, criticisms, suggestions, and possibly ideas for future fics. You can even post requests if you like. (though I do have some stipulations on those) The majority of my stories will be posted on my new account at ff.net (I'll get the link when I remember) but I will occasionally post some of the shorter ones here.

I also should say that I have begun a new story (which is another reason why this one was taking so long). I can say that it's much shorter than this one and the central characters are Yoh, Anna and Hana. Whoa, I'm rambling. So I'll stop here. No need to reply, well not until I post the last chapter. And please note that if you do not review after the story ends I WILL HUNT YOU DOWN. DON'T THINK I DON'T KNOW WHERE YOU LIVE... ahem *cough* Yeah. I'll go now.
*runs*

[Sayoky]

*sniff* i can't believe this is the end of your story... *sigh* i've read chapter 16 ages ago (not really XDD) but i was too lazy to post and besides, i wasn't really suppose to be on the internet so i couldn't ost even if i wanted to because my mom would have hear the keyboard ticking and i would have been busted XDDD yes...hard life for me...........

[kfttjdb]

Sayoky, you weren't supposed to post yet...*hides brick behind her back*

Okay, so here's what's taking so long with the last chapter (I finally figured it out.) I'm not finished writing it yet, and right in the middle of it I freaked out. I'm too long-winded so I have to cut it shorter than it is now. Don't worry. I know exactly how it ends; I knew when I wrote the 6th chapter how the story was going to end. So that's not the issue. I just have to finish typing it up and then I'll post it.

Now then, since I'm commenting again: I would like everyone who has read the fic, including those who have never posted in the thread to participate in this. And I want all feedback. Telling me the whole thing was a worthless piece of crap and I should never do it again is just as helpful as telling me it was pretty good. So when I post it (And it should be complete Thursday, don't shoot) Everyone start talking. Or I'll have to get my bag of bricks and buy some plane tickets... (gotta know I was kidding there)

[Sayoky]

nuuu..you missunderstood me...i ment that i couldn't believe your story was ALMOST over....sorry if I wasn't clear enough...tre real drama shall take place after you really post chapter 17.....

[kfttjdb]

Ok everyone. It's here. The Final Chapter.

Again, thanks so much to everyone who's been reading. Now then, read and review away!!!!!!

Chapter 17:
And Moving On

Anna slowly led Yukihiro into the house, the group staring at her as she made her way to the middle of the room. Yukihiro was breathing so heavily, she could barely speak.

“Did you run all the way here?” Horo asked suddenly.

“The better question is, ‘what are you doing here?’” Pirika spat angrily.

Yukihiro sat in a chair and slowly caught her breath. “I need to talk to Ren,” she said finally.

“Ren’s gone. You drove him away, remember?” Pirika shot again, this time approaching her chair as if to strike her. “Why don’t you go home where someone actually wants to see you?!”

“Pirika, that’s enough.” Anna said sharply. “Go sit with Lyserg.”

Pirika stared at Anna briefly as if she had yelled at her then obeyed.

“Anna this is important. I need to talk to him. Where is he?” Yukihiro asked again.

“Yukihiro, he’s gone. He and Yoh left for the airport right before you came.” Anna said sadly.

Yukihiro gasped slightly by the comment. “No, not yet.” She said under her breath, “I have to stop him!”

She quickly stood up from her chair and bolted for the door. As she was about to open it, Anna grabbed her arm.

“What are you doing? Let go of me! I have to stop him!” Yukihiro pleaded.

“I can’t let you do this,” Anna said gravely. “I don’t know what you’re thinking about here, but I think you’ll make matters worse.”

“I know I made a mistake when you came over, Anna. That was my pride getting in the way. I know that now. Please, just let me go.” She pleaded again.

“So that’s where she went,” Horo said softly.

“I’m not going to listen to any more of this!” Pirika yelled, charging Yukihiro again. “I’m not letting you anywhere near him ever again. You don’t deserve him!”

Anna released her grip from Yukihiro and attempted to restrain Pirika by grabbing her arms. “Sit down now!” she said angrily.

Lyserg stood quickly to pull Pirika away from them. “What are you doing?” he scolded.

“We just don’t understand any of this, Yukihiro.” Tamao said, “Why does Hao live with you?”

“I don’t have time for this. I have to stop Ren! Don’t you see what’s happening here? If I don’t catch him and he gets on that plane, I’ll lose him forever!” Yukihiro cried. “I have to go!”

“What if you’ve already lost him?” Anna replied.

Yukihiro paused at the door and looked at her. “Are you trying to hurt me?” she asked as if wounded.

“What makes you think that finding him will change anything? I’m not trying to be mean, Yukihiro, I just want you to be rational here.” Anna walked closer to the door and attempted to guide Yukihiro back in with the others.

“I have to risk it. He has to know how I feel,” Yukihiro said quickly while reopening the door. The person outside startled her.

“Hao, what are you doing here?” Anna asked loudly.

“Who?” Horo asked, jumping from his seat.

Yukihiro looked at him with utter confusion then anger. “So you followed me?” she asked challengingly.

“I’m sure this has been great fun for all of you,” Hao called out to the house, “but Yukihiro has to leave now.” He grabbed her arm and forced her roughly out of the house and into the front yard.

Anna, who was closest to the door, did not protest the action. Instead she closed the door and sighed. “Maybe this was a good thing,” she said.

---

“So are we going to talk about this or not?” Yoh asked uneasily.

“Talk about what?” Ren replied.

“We’re sitting in the airport waiting on a Tao jet to whisk you away. You’re actually asking me that?” Yoh began rocking his leg impatiently.

“There’s nothing to discuss, Yoh. This was a well planned decision,” Ren started, ignoring Yoh’s sighs, “and I fully intend to board that jet when my sister arrives.”

They sat in silence for a few moments, side by side. Yoh scratched his head and shifted his body weight.

“Manta doesn’t even know you’re leaving.” He said suddenly.

“I’ll write him a letter,” Ren replied.

“Ryu doesn’t know either. What if he comes by the house looking for you?” Yoh shot back.

“I’ll write him a letter too.”

“What if Faust decides to fly in?”

“A letter, Yoh.”

“And Chocolove? He doesn’t…” Yoh started.

“Stop it!” Ren yelled, cutting him off. “I’m getting on that plane, Yoh. Stop trying to make me feel bad.”

They sat in silence a few moments more. Yoh scratched his head again.

“What about Yukihiro?” he asked lowly.

Ren sighed and closed his eyes. “It doesn’t matter at this point, Yoh. You won’t convince me I’m making the wrong decision.” He paused. “I’ll miss all of you, but it won’t be as if we’ll never see each other again. I’ll fly in occasionally and I’ll write. Now stop this.”

---

“What are you doing here, Hao?” Yukihiro screamed.

“You were right. I followed you.” He said calmly.

“You’re not going to change my mind about this,” she said angrily.

“I’m not trying to. I’m just wondering why you’re wasting your time here when Ren’s at the airport. Do you want to get there or not?” Hao said calmly, holding out his hand.

“What?” Yukihiro was confused. “You came to help me? But…but you hate Ren?”

“Yes, and I love you. Now come on, you’re wasting time. I’ll take you to the airport.” He said with a slight smile.

Yukihiro embraced him tightly. “Thank you so much!” she cried. “Wait. You don’t have a car.” She pulled back and stared at him in confusion.

Hao returned her stare with a sly smile. “Don’t worry about it. Let’s go.”

---

“If you say it’s the right decision for you, I guess I can’t argue,” Yoh said, defeated.

“Finally,” Ren said under his breath. “Don’t worry Yoh. I won’t forget about you.”

“Ren!”

“Did you hear that?” Yoh asked, looking around the busy sitting area.

“It’s Jun!” Ren said ecstatically.

“Hello Ren!” Jun said when she approached the two. She kissed her brother on the cheek despite his discontent.

“Hi Jun,” Yoh said, attempting to sound happy.

“Hello, Yoh. How are things at home?” she replied cheerily.

“Oh, they’re great.” He lied.

A random servant gathered Ren’s bags and disappeared. Jun stared at Ren and Yoh and smiled.

“I’ll let you two talk. Ren and I have a long time to catch up. I’ll see you on the plane.” Jun said with a smile. She waved at Yoh and followed the servant.

“So. I guess this is goodbye.” Ren said as calmly as possible. He stretched out his hand to shake Yoh’s, but Yoh hugged him instead. Ren normally hated when Yoh was affectionate in this way, but today he welcomed it and returned the embrace.

“I’ll miss you, Ren.” Yoh said softly.

“I’ll miss you too.” Ren replied.

When Yoh finally released him, he smiled, hit him hard on the back, and disappeared in the crowed.

Suddenly, Ren was alone. He felt awkward for no real reason. “Just go.” He said aloud. As he made his way through the crowd he stopped when he heard someone calling his name.

“Ren! REN!!! Wait!!!”

He spun around quickly to see who wanted to talk to him so badly. When he saw the woman with long brown hair standing in front of him he froze.

“Yukihiro?” he couldn’t say anything else. For a few moments, he couldn’t think.

“Ren, please wait.” She repeated. “I have to tell you something. I know what the trouble is now.”

“What?” He found himself only being able to respond one word at a time.

“I’m sorry. I’ve been running for so long. It’s time we both just stop running Ren. I love you.”

Ren was unable to decipher the rest of what she said, for he only heard the last three words. The words he had longed to hear her say.

“Please say something,” Yukihiro said timidly. She approached him slowly and became dangerously close to his face.

Ren did not speak. Instead he pulled her closer to his body and pressed his lips against hers.

Yukihiro welcomed this passionate kiss and wrapped her arms around his neck. She felt accomplished. She felt loved.

When he released her, he brought his lips slowly to her ear. She waited impatiently, knowing he was about to say something spectacular.

With the greatest warmth and endearment he whispered, “Goodbye, Yukihiro.”

He released her completely and stood in front of her for a few seconds. Then, he smiled weakly and continued his trek to the plane.

She watched him as he walked away from her with her eyes wide-eyed. The tears quickly filled her eyes and overflowed onto her cheeks. With her hands trembling violently and her teeth chattering uncontrollably she whispered, “Goodbye Ren.”

THE END

So I guess first thing's first: What did you think?

[KuroiInu]

Yesh! First review!


...Wow, Renna. Just... wow. I have to say... the ending was quite the sucker punch... ;_;

The whole story was incredible... you started off very light-hearted, what with the rock star tee-shirts and jokes... and managed to bring it all to a very sad ending. In spite of the sadness, it didn't seem too unsatisfactory... It was depressing, but very final, and very definite. I think that's where your talent comes out- you managed to write and incredible story, with an unexpected ending... but nothing was rushed or left too ambiguous. I think the only thing left open was why Hao lived with Yukihiro... which was kind of settled when Hao had his change of heart, and showed that he wasn't that bad a person.

And of course, the other talent I can't go without mentioning- your ability to write emotions... wonderfully. All of the feeling and heart behind this really came out in each character's emotions...

It didn't feel like a fanfiction that was thrown together... it was thought out and beautifully planned. Excellent job, Renna-chan. I eagerly await your next fic.

~Kuroi